This is how I feel about my dad - I wrote it as a poem. PLEASE TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK!!?

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Hi,

Please read my poem - I know that it's long. However, it would be greatly appreciated i you can tell me what you think of it.

It’s been so long since our family fell apart.
I’ll never forget the damage that you punctured into my heart.
All the grief, the misery, and the darkness that you put me through
and how you never cared what I wanted to do.
Now that you have a new family, suddenly now you decide to care.
Words are only words that I only hear, but the truth is that you’re never there.
You never saw the development of the woman that I became today.
You only remember the bad choices that I made.
But still, you want me back in your life
just to please your new daughter and your wife.
I’m sure that you never told them how you made my life burn like fire
and how you tried to persuade me of throwing away my true desires.
So, I can be daddy’s perfect picture.
My heart will always remain pure,
unlike yours who destroyed every hope that I had in you.
Good luck to you trying to pretend to your baby girl that you’re a perfect dad.
Honey, he’ll only tear your heart apart and at the end at of the day he will only see the bad.
He’ll leave you crying in the corner full of misery and then he’ll try to convince you that he will change.
Dad, it’s always the same.
The games you play, the lies that slip out of your mouth and how you smile with that evil grin.
You’re such a disappointment in my eyes, and I can count how many times you commuted sin.
I’m better off now with out you holding my hand, because you were never there after all.
You only watched every time someone punched me into the wall.
Saying that I should do better, and you only let me down.
I only hoped that one day that you would come around,
to tell me that you are proud.
We can’t rewrite history, and you can’t fixed the damage in my heart.
Because you made me feel worthless, and that I can never end what I started.
After everything that you put me through,
I’m glad that I never put my faith in you.

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Take note: I'm almost eighteen years old.

Answer 1

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Very well writen i can say that..... it sure told me how u felt...it also told me that ur only writing these poems becasue your mad at ur dad but u have anger inside u that u need to let out, becasue of those things ur father told u.....those hurtful words he let slip out of his mouth and into ur ears.......it made u feel worthless and now ur sad cause ur just now realizing he's not gonna change and u wish u cold have thought about that earlyer...... |Very good poem u asked my opinion and i told u the truth, if u have any questions plese email me at [e-mail]

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im just that good!♥

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THANKS EVERYONE!!

You truly understood my poem - thank for your in depth opinion of my poem. It touched my heart.

Best of luck to you!!

Answer 2

It's a little cliche, but as long as it makes you feel better that is the important part. Write as many of these as you need to.

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Former English major. Switching to psychology :)

Answer 3

it was great! it rhymes nicely and i never lost interest. :) definite A plus work!

Answer 4

It made me cry! Thats a simmilar story with my *dad*, i have just recently moved to new zealand and he wouldnt even say bye. I know exactly how you feel :(