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Canadian, and i freakin love it! =D I like hanging out with friends I also have a "affliction" which cause me to lean towards anyone with alcohol, lol check me out on facebook Thomas Duthie ; ) check ya later ANY AND ALL POETRY I POST IS UNDER COPYRIGHT BY ME. TO REPOST OR CLAIM AS YOUR OWN WORK WITHOUT PERMISSION IS ILLEGAL AND YOU WILL FEEL THE FULL WRATH OF THE LAW

  • What does it mean when you have a dream about someone?

    I have dreamed about somebody a few times now, but i always dream about them right before i wake up, is there any significance to this? I understand that just dreaming about somebody means they're on your mind a lot, i was wondering if dreaming about them right before i wake up has any significance...

    1 AnswerDream Interpretation1 decade ago
  • Please give me your opinion on this sonnet.?

    Wrote it myself. Any suggestions for this piece or future writing?

    Take It Slow

    We don't have to rush, let's just take it slow

    A kiss and a blush and I'm good to go

    As long as it makes me see, lets me know

    Just hold my hand and use your pretty smile

    Just let me know that this is worth my while

    And for you, I swear, I would run a mile

    Just show me that I'm not wasting my time

    Teach me that loving you isn't a crime

    But we can take it slow, set our own pace

    We will stop this world, we will change those stars

    Together we will escape this rat race

    We won't need any cash, and we won't need cars

    We'll take it slow, and we'll chill on this beach

    We'll need the time

    There's a lot to learn, even more to teach

    4 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • A poem that i can't get quite right =S, help pls.?

    "Tell Me.."

    Are you pleased with what you've done?

    Burned the bridges, and had your fun,

    smoke from the decay, blocks the sun

    Tell me..

    Do you grin at the demise you've caused?

    tore at innocent flesh, without a pause,

    blood flowing fresh, off of your claws

    Tell me..

    Were you entertained by their screams?

    naive allies falling, to your ruthless regimes,

    no one ever suspected, your violent schemes

    Tell me..

    Do you find delight in someones pain?

    taking pride in the souls you've slain,

    smirk, as you watch their lives wane

    Tell me..

    What would you do, if someone ended your reign?

    I bet you'd beg for peace, but it'd be in vain,

    and you'd plea for mercy, and they would feign,

    they'd take you in, not forgetting your bane

    You'd turn your back, and get a knife with disdain,

    Instantly you'd see your folly, it was always so plain,

    love was your goal, you started right, but became inane

    I'm fine with everything but my last stanza, i meant it to be longer, but i don't think i got the last one as good as it could be specifically the BANE, DISDAIN, and INANE lines. If you could help me out and fix them you'd be my hero, because that's as good as i can get them.

    Also what do you think of the poem overall? =)

    1 AnswerPoetry1 decade ago
  • "An honest lie", a poem i'm working on, i need help tho?

    I was too trusting, too naive

    believed you needed me, would never leave

    in that endless instant, before the door

    when you looked back to see me on the floor

    i was floating above, as far as i could perceive

    above my body, as i watched you grieve

    over my cold hands, and my selfish gore

    i thought you didn't love me anymore

    but as i watched your tears begin to fall

    i couldn't help myself, i began to bawl

    I still loved you, and realized you loved me

    the way you hurt, made me plea

    to god above, to end my sorry squall

    i promised never to keep my love in thrall

    i learned my lesson, so he did agree

    to send me back, and let me be free

    from deaths icy hands and empty heart

    my soul no longer his, i did depart

    back to my body, back to your arms

    i felt so safe, from earthly harms

    as i came to, i knew we'd never part

    what was almost the end, was only the start

    first what do you think about it (1-10 scale). Are there anyways to improve that you can see?

    4 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Cool new poem, "Fathoms", What do you think (1-10)?

    As they say, you've hit rock bottom

    to your pain, you'll undoubtedly succumb

    just remember it could always be worse

    this is every man and woman's curse

    Even if it's cloudy it could still rain

    If you're hurt, there's a worse pain

    but i could be your saving grace

    toss a line and bring you to a safe place

    pull you from a prison you won't miss

    and we could live, in love, and in bliss

    if you can improve it at all please share, general comments are welcome too =P

    2 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • "Worker Bees" My new poem =), whatcha' think?

    oh you poor little worker bees

    no one around to hear your pleas

    you'll work your life until you die

    no one around to hear you cry

    unknowing of the pains of love

    no concept of god above

    numb to all, there is no pain

    a life like that, is quite plain

    oh you poor little worker bees

    all that honey, is such a tease

    Do you ever get to take a sip?

    nix, the queen would surely flip

    So you live you insignificant lives

    buzzing around your various hives

    never stopping to think or feel

    you existence is somewhat surreal

    oh you poor little worker bees

    carefree you fly on the breeze

    kissing flowers, and making honey

    every day a gem, it's always sunny

    The life of a worker bee may not be so bad

    maybe worker bees are always glad

    to fly from flower to flower every day

    every day a blessing like each sun ray

    What do you think it means?(if you get it 100% right you'll get best answer) Can you find anyways to make it better?

    11 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • After a short hiatus my newest poem: Worker bees?

    oh you poor little worker bees

    no one around to hear your pleas

    you'll work your life until you die

    no one around to hear you cry

    unknowing of the pains of love

    no concept of god above

    numb to all, there is no pain

    a life like that, is quite plain

    oh you poor little worker bees

    all that honey, is such a tease

    Do you ever get to take a sip?

    nix, the queen would surely flip

    So you live you insignificant lives

    buzzing around your various hives

    never stopping to think or feel

    you existence is somewhat surreal

    oh you poor little worker bees

    carefree you fly on the breeze

    kissing flowers, and making honey

    every day a gem, it's always sunny

    The life of a worker bee may not be so bad

    maybe worker bees are always glad

    to fly from flower to flower every day

    every day a blessing like each sun ray

    Any suggestions to make it better are welcome, as well as just comments

    at the start of writing this *I* didn't even know it would end happily for the little bees, but it's the only ending i could come up with, if someone can think of a better way that i like it's best answer for sure

    1 AnswerPoetry1 decade ago
  • After humanity is wiped out....?

    ...What species do YOU believe will rise to the top of the evolutionary pyramid?

    Personally i think Octopi have potential, as having oppsosable limbs is very useful...and they have 8 of them

    4 AnswersPolls & Surveys1 decade ago
  • "Lucidity" one of the better poems i've written. If you're a fan of my work, check it out!?

    "Lucidity"

    Last night I had a dream about you

    Staring at me with your eyes so blue

    sparkling to put diamonds to shame

    yet fierce, like a fire too hot to tame

    they say if you love something set it free

    I told you to go, but you came back to me

    So you were mine forever, and mine to keep

    I thought, "No longer will i lie awake and weep"

    So I stared back deeply and pleaded my love

    swore my devotion to the heavens above

    But i awoke and realized it was just a dream

    and in desperation i began to scream

    "Why can i only ever be happy as i sleep,

    every waking instant torture, from hiding this love so deep"

    Sometimes i wish i could simply sleep forever

    always to dream, in peace, to awaken never

    a coma, or death, would be an escape quite clever

    i'd always be happy, and we could always be together

    5 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • "lucidity" another poem for you guys to read =)?

    "Lucidity"

    Last night I had a dream about you

    Staring at me with your eyes so blue

    sparkling to put diamonds to shame

    yet fierce, like a fire too hot to tame

    they say if you love something set it free

    I told you to go, but you came back to me

    So you were mine forever, and mine to keep

    I thought, "No longer will i lie awake and weep"

    So I stared back deeply and pleaded my love

    swore my devotion to the heavens above

    But i awoke and realized it was just a dream

    and in desperation i began to scream

    "Why can i only ever be happy as i sleep,

    every waking instant torture, from hiding this love so deep"

    Sometimes i wish i could simply sleep forever

    always to dream, in peace, to awaken never

    a coma, or death, would be an escape quite clever

    i'd always be happy, and we could always be together

    © Thomas J. Robertson

    5 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • It's complete! i revised my newest poem, what do you all think of it?

    "A Midsummer Murder"(title needs work, any suggestions?)

    they say that ignorance truly is bliss

    because in the dark there's no one to miss

    You wickedly tricked me into loving you

    with your eyes, so innocent and blue

    Why does my love remain after broken trust

    why do you take pleasure from things unjust

    you deceived me into this prison

    from which no one has ever risen

    and in desperation i turned to the sky

    prayed for the help of an angel up high

    but the angel of death answered my call

    promised he would free me of this thrall

    he said could release me from this dark cell

    would calm this ocean that no others could quell

    that he'd bring me the sanctuary of death

    the release that comes from the last breath

    because with icy cheeks i can't feel the sting of her kiss

    and no pulse means no pain, from a broken promise

    i took his offer, and he brought me peace

    released from your shackles my pain did cease

    the only problem i personally can see now is that in line 12 i might not have used "Thrall" properly.

    6 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Have you ever had a "lucid" dream?

    A dream where you become aware that you're dreaming?

    What are some ways to increase my chances of my dreams becoming lucid?

    What are some ways that i can just remember more of my dreams?(i hear this helps with lucid dreaming)

    if you have had a lucid dream before, what did you do in the dream?

    9 AnswersPsychology1 decade ago
  • My Top 3 poems, which one do YOU think is the best?

    "Breathless"

    the wary raven, is mournfully crowing

    on a cold night, it's innocently snowing

    and the reaper, he is out mowing

    seeds of sorrow, he is sowing

    and the river Styx, is ever flowing

    check your fear, for it is growing

    hear the horns, they are blowing

    it is your time, and all signs are showing

    "Divinity"

    A beauty too perfect for this world

    my love so deep, like the ocean it swirled

    a beauty as if chiseled by the gods

    my love so pure, it survives all odds

    an angel on earth defies all human logic

    my love like a plague, this sickness neurologic

    an angel so magnificent, she outshines the sun

    my love so purist, it'll be changed by none

    "Oasis Dreams"

    there's never an escape it seems

    as your face always haunts my dreams

    i see your beauty when i close my eyes

    in despair i give soft whimpers, and softer cries

    a despair so sweet i can't get enough

    i seek a sanctuary, but the search is tough

    lost in a desert, of this love unrequited

    this plague of love, that you've left me blighted

    when i dream you're there, hair sparkled with moon beams

    when i try to run, i stand frozen, and hear my own screams

    it's like you're a devil so sweet, you're beauty belies

    the torture you cause, while you hide in you're guise

    i say i don't love you, but you easily call this bluff

    but i have to get away, to lose this fear, try and slough

    this pain you've wrought, for this crime you'll be indicted

    for this pain you've caused, and the dark corners you've lighted

    there's the three that i think are best, although that is easily up for debate lol. So which one is best?

    8 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • A darker/sadder poem, on request of many ppl =T what do you think?

    this poem is untitled so far, and it's not perfect yet. i was wondering if anybody could help me out by fixing the rythm because i suck at rhythms, and if anybody could think of a good title, but hre it is:

    Ignorance truly is bliss

    because in the dark there's no one to miss

    i was tricked into loving you

    with your eyes, innocent and blue

    Why does my love remain after broken trust

    why do you take pleasure from things unjust

    you deceived me into this prison

    from which no one has ever arisen

    in desperation i turned to the sky

    and prayed for the help of an angel up high

    only the angel of death answered my cry

    he promised that unlike the other he could tell no lie

    he said he could release me from this dark cell

    could calm this oceans that no others could quell

    that he'd bring the sanctuary of death

    the release that comes from the last breath

    because with icy cheeks i can't feel the sting of her kiss

    and no pulse means no pain, from a broken promise

    i took his offer, and he brought me peace

    released from you shackles my pain did cease

    *sigh* there it is, it's a little rough at a few parts, i just want to post it to see if anyone thinks it has potential, i'll shine it up a bit later =T

    11 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • i thought of this poem after a dream i had, what do you think? =)?

    k i just woke up after having this dream about this girl i love <3

    it's a little rough but i like the form it's in now, but what do you all think?

    "You're love"

    more beautiful than the reddest rose

    more elegant than the softest silk

    when i'm near you my hearts in repose

    for your love i have a debt i can't bilk

    an endless river, my devotion flows

    pure, cleansing me and all my ilk

    the divinity of new life, see how it glows

    the water healing all pain and hurt

    like the greenest plant, my love only grows

    that such beauty can rise from but dirt

    distracts me from such feeble human woes

    i'm free from these shackles and will never revert

    to the prison of the lonely and their throws

    <3<3<3 i wish i was a bolder person so i could tell her how i feel =(....i can still dream though.......and yes i meant "You're love" as in literally "You Are love" i think it's a cool title

    6 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • A revised poem, i think it's better but what do you think?

    "Mr. Right"

    So you say there's no "Mr.right"

    That there's no man to hold you tight

    to plead his love every day and night

    You say that true love is long dead

    to hear your pain fills me with dread

    and weighs my heart down like lead

    to hear that there's no good man for you

    Gives me the need to say these things true

    there is a man who'll love through and through

    a man who sees your every word as a jewel

    who won't do things that are so unjustly cruel

    who will realize through your pain that he's a fool

    someone who knows , in your wisdom, that your always right

    who'll scold the jealous sun for trying to burn as bright

    who's every glance brings you a heavenly light

    someone who bows at your divination

    who can ease you in times of frustration

    and swears your the source of all creation

    ....but you say there is no such thing as love....

    ....you remain grounded and watch those above...

    ....who fly on the wings of heavenly doves...

    ....as you sit, and watch and have noone beloved....

    don't worry about not being able to compare them, this one is better anyways, what do you think? any ways to improve it?

    also the last four lines need to be fixed a little

    7 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • Another poem, what do you think?

    i wrote this one after ranting to someone on Y!answers that thinks theres no such thing as "The perfect man"....here goes....

    So you say there's no "Mr.right"

    That there's no man to hold you tight

    to plead his love every day and night

    You say that true love is long dead

    to hear your pain fills me with dread

    and weighs my heart down like lead

    to hear that there's no good man for you

    Gives me the need to say these things true

    there is a man who'll love through and through

    a man who sees your every word as a jewel

    who won't do things that are so unjustly cruel

    who will realize through your pain that he's a fool

    someone who knows , in your wisdom, that your always right

    who'll scold the jealous sun for trying to burn as bright

    who's every glance can lift you to a new height

    ....but you say there is no such thing as love....

    ....you remain grounded and watch those above...

    ....who fly on the dove-like wings....of love....

    it ends to abruptly and i can't think of a good ending for it, can anyone help me out?

    3 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • My newest poem, a little like the others, what do you think?

    "Divinity" ? i'm running out of titles lol

    A beauty too perfect for this world

    my love so deep, like the ocean it swirled

    a beauty as if chiseled by the gods

    my love so pure, it survives all odds

    an angel on earth defies all human logic

    my love like a plague, this sickness neurologic

    an angel so magnificent, she outshines the sun

    my love so purist, it'll be changed by none

    any comments or any way to improve it are welcome suggestions?

    12 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • I'm on a roll1 3rd love poem i've written today, what do you think?

    i wrote this one up in a storm, it just sort of flowed out what do you all think? If you can find anyways to ix the rhythm or rhyme please comment. If you REALLy lke it and want me to make it longer just say something, i fel like i good keep going with this one....enjoy! =)

    "Oasis Dreams"

    there's never an escape it seems

    as your face always haunts my dreams

    i see your beauty when i close my eyes

    in despair i give soft whimpers, and softer cries

    a despair so sweet i can't get enough

    i seek a sanctuary, but the search is tough

    lost in a desert, of this love unrequited

    this plague of love, that you've left me blighted

    when i dream you're there, hair sparkled with moon beams

    when i try to run, i stand frozen and hear screams

    it's like you're a devil so sweet, you're beauty belies

    the torture you cause, while you hide in you're guise

    i say i don't love you, but you easily call this bluff

    but i have to get away, to lose this fear, try and slough

    this pain you've wrought, for this crime you'll be indicted

    for this pain you've caused, and the dark corners you've lighted

    5 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago
  • A new love poem i wrote, what do you think? be nice tho =S?

    firstly, i fall in love too easily i wrote this poem about a girl i don't even know, i've only seen a picture of her =(.....she's so beautiful though, i wrote this, what do you think:

    "Divine Grace"

    looking at a picture, falling in love with your grace

    every touch sends me flying, skin softer than lace

    bringing back feelings, like a forgotten childhood place

    feelings that are alien, you leave me lost in space

    the tears flowing, like vulgar diamonds plaguing your face

    even angels can be sad, never feel like it's a disgrace

    your beauty is endless, not seen in the human race

    your love is priceless, something i can never replace

    all my fears vanish, never leaving the smallest trace

    of who i was, before i had love, and before your grace

    god i'm hopeless ='(... what do you all think about the poem tho? please say anyway you think i can improve.......also, this is a stupid question but, do you think if i ever made this good enough, and got to know her, that if i showed her this she might like it?

    8 AnswersPoetry1 decade ago