Frindofo asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

Should I say I am asking for criticism?

Hey God.

Am I screaming' atcha again?

Am I lost and lonely

Feelin' like You the only frien --

Again?

Pounding the Skys while I fly

Past by and by

Once upon the massive time

Bound Rock pounds down

But still we try.

There is a scansion of sound

around Where and

When and Why

The How sits forever about

We question it never,

Besides.

I SCREAM AT THE STORM

Clouds lightning suck it in

I begin to be conscious of

Power and Pain

Drifting lifewise in heated

Discussion about how to

Battle the

Storm.

Update:

to 123mtb456: if you can't read it then I guess it must be unwritten.

Update 2:

2 ec: it is meant to be spoken word, memorized and chanted.

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  • Ronnie
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago
    Favorite Answer

    That was really good. It had a very pleasant sound.

  • 1 decade ago

    Who am I to criticize I don't even know how to read a poem lol.

  • 1 decade ago

    i like it! it almost reminds me of a chant or a rap... very unique with a lot of feeling.

    peace. good luck!

  • 1 decade ago

    good poem.

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