jerry g asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

What do you guys think of this work? honest oppinions?

Around it goes up and down,

In swirls mounting clear and sound.

How lovely a feather can be,

when an illusion of flying it gives to thee.

Around it's colors gray, black or blue,

a difference only human's can see.

Thou shalt not be fooled, the blue is as clear as can be.

Flying is an illusion and not reality.

For humans know this we believe we can be.

But like the feather tis only an illusion we give to thee.

For most of us though shall his poem have meaning.

For most of us know how crude life can be.

Wouldn't it be wonderful had the wretched truth not bin sown.

Oh how, many grieve the illusion had not bin so.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    its nice man, but some places its like a sentences try to change tat man............

    keep on writing..

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    i don't get it. lol. Feathers and illusion of a unseen feather? Is it because it's too good to be true?

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