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Anonymous asked in Education & ReferenceHomework Help · 9 years ago

GRAMMAR HELP - can someone check this over...?

The black-clad musicians gave a vibrant and theatrical performance against a backdrop of swirling colours of indigo, magenta and emerald green. Lightburn’s resonant voice rose over the mingling sound of guitars, drums, keyboard, and even the gentle jangle of a tambourine.

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  • Bob R.
    Lv 6
    9 years ago
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    The black-clad musicians gave a vibrant and theatrical performance against a backdrop of swirling colours—indigo, magenta, and emerald green. Lightburn’s resonant voice rose over the mingling sound of guitars, drums, keyboard, and the gentle jangle of a tambourine.

    just a couple of minor edits to make it flow better; are you british? the spelling of colours is the british style

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  • Daniel
    Lv 5
    9 years ago

    . Sounds better than earlier, though "resonant" is somewhat redundant.

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