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Anonymous asked in Society & CultureLanguages · 10 years ago

BARB-you got you points - more grammar help......someone check for me?

While some may argue that athletes are tested mentally and physically, when they play their respective sports, they are nothing more than entertainers.

The social learning theory, perhaps the most influential theory of learning and development, proposed by Albert Bandura, argued that people learn new information and behaviours by watching other people.

According to this theory, children may imitate the positive behaviours an athlete practices in his sport, such as following rules, striving for improvement and teamwork. But, they will also emulate the missteps and mishaps of athletes.

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  • Anonymous
    10 years ago
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    "While some may argue that athletes are tested mentally and physically [no point for this comma] when they play their respective sports, they are nothing more than entertainers.

    The social learning theory, perhaps the most influential theory of learning and development, proposed by Albert Bandura, argued that people learn new information and behaviours by watching other people.

    According to this theory, children may imitate the positive behaviours an athlete practices in his sport, such as following rules, striving for improvement, and striving for teamwork. But, they will also emulate the missteps and mishaps of athletes."

    "The social learning theory, perhaps the most influential theory of learning and development, proposed by Albert Bandura, argued that people learn new information and behaviours by watching other people." Choose "perhaps the most influential theory of learning and development," or "proposed by Albert Bandura," or find some way of getting them both into one subordinate (dependent) clause, because I don't think that two works very well. Oh, there is only one subordinate clause. Even so, having two comma things together... Just sounds wrong. You could just get rid of one of them, then.

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