What do you think of my poem?
so i have to write a poem for our poetry unit in english class, not too sure if all of it makes sense and sounds alright. So please just give me some useful suggestion, also your opinion and tell me if it is really terrible so i can write a new one. Also the topic is "green earth" and do you think this poem express it clearly?
There was once a time, not too long ago,
When the earth was still green, when the flowers were still blooming
The cloudless blue sky was filled with the sweet morning chirps of birds,
The wind swaying the blossoming buds spurting out of the flourishing plants,
The clear, sunny day, the sky filled with the radiating golden rays of sunlight,
Lighting up the ocean, like a shimmering silver blanket of million shades of blue,
The blooming flowers shined its beauty in the wonderful daylight,
That was our earth, not too long ago.
The earth will become, not long in time,
Just a piece of cold barren land, where no plants shall grow,
The sweet melody of the birds will be missed,
And Cloudless, blue skies would only be seen in dreams,
And the sunshine shall not shine through the thick misty haze.
The babbling brooks, and soft ocean waves will no longer be here,
For it had dried up into the hard crackly ground.
And then, only then,
We will watch, as our grandchildren stare into the ugly grey sky,
Knowing that they will never see the beauty of this earth again,
We will regret destroying something so precious so easily.
There will not be another earth,
When the earth is gone, there is no turning back.
If we don’t do something now, we may never have the chance again.
- 8 years agoFavorite Answer
I think that it's really good
- 8 years ago
boring , a beauty of poem is minimal words = still conveying the idea yours is more of a paragraph
- 8 years ago
I think it's beautiful :) well done!