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Whispering Man:

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He looks upon himself

with cautioned eyes

noticing the unrelenting

silece distilled in his manner;

never emerging out his world

hoping that in the midst

of the presence of momentary silence

his stage whisper may carry

to blunted ears.

But words not lost in translation fall

to the deaf;

yet he endures his silence

as summer heats pass

and colored leaves fall

his cowardice holds him

to his standard

to never speak his reality,

or write his words,

to be on point,

or never understood.

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  • Anonymous
    8 years ago
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    "He looks upon himself with cautioned eyes" I love that line of words, is so_so descriptive and brings upon the feeling of the point..... as for the rest, I think you so work on adding more and better flow like rhyme or however you spell it hahahahaha really good poem but really needs that rhyming flow I think

  • ?
    Lv 5
    8 years ago

    I graded you down for the words but,to (filler fluff), then I remembered I don't rate poems, honestly after I take out those Words I like your poem

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