Poem C/C? Give honest feedback.?

I Love You, I Love You,

but I Love You.

Words uttered to easily

thrown around by

the beholder as if these words

are meaningless to the

receiver;

Trying to catch the ear

of another and persuade

them with deceptive

calls.

I Love You, I Love You,

but I Love You.

Repetition does not

make these words

more true than if said

once; this phrase stands

alone with no meaning from

me with this word bearing no

weight but comfort to her.

I Love You, I Love You,

but I Love You.

Is this not what

you need to hear?

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    Lv 5
    8 years ago
    Favorite Answer

    Yeah it's pretty good.

    *too easily (not to easily)

    I don't really like how each line is broken up. It makes it sound a bit awkward I think.

    Work on the punctuation. I think this sounds better:

    "I love You, I love You -

    But I love You."

  • 8 years ago

    While I don't strictly care for the poem, it makes a very valid point, even in L 1 and it is "too".

    Saying the words is easy, causing it to be real, felt, held to, is a process that could take/last a lifetime.

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