Unique asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 2 months ago

Opinions on a poem I wrote about someone who died ?

Forever and always you will be in my heart 

Neither time, space, nor matter can drift us apart 

The day you left my world crashed down to my feet

Memories in my head of us were on repeat 

My eyes cried rivers 

My heart was cut into pieces by scissors 

But I know you’re better off in the kingdom of heaven 

I will forever and always love you I’ve never stopped since I was seven 

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  • 2 months ago

    Forever and always you'll be in my heart,

    Nether time nor matter can drift us apart,

    The day that you left, my world crashed down, 

    Though safe you're now in the kingdom above, Memories of your eyes brought me to tears, 

    Even at seven, you calmed all my fears. 

    • Deanna King2 months agoReport

      Sorry about the fifth line.  I don't know how to post poetry.

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  • 2 months ago

    i think its a good poem

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  • 2 months ago

    It's a very personal poem and as such should not be judged. I sense the sentiment so it's an effective poem

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