Loosey™ asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 2 months ago

I would like to know how much I got across with my poem using obscure words. Worth the effort or not? Appreciate any comments. Thanks.?

Out there where the ships

fall off the horizon

Tattered sea fog tendrils

try to catch them

As they spill over the edge

onto the backs of turtles

Where they’re

Dashed among shells

so freshly waxed

You can see moonshine

reflected in their green sheen

Flying Dutchman

and terrapin soup

Stirred well with mainmast and mizzen

a dainty dish for Charon

Who waits

in the only boat that’s still afloat

Out there where the ships

fall of the horizon

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  • Anonymous
    2 months ago
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    There aren't any obscure words here, at least to anyone with a decent vocabulary. Other than that, it's outstanding (and I never say that here). If it's not plagiarized, well done. . 

    • Loosey™
      Lv 7
      2 months agoReport

      Thank you.  Nope, it’s mine 😀

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  • 2 months ago

    It's nice but I think you can do better...we can all always do better maybe sometimes worse but. It Obviously make people think out there where we fell off.....served well

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  • 2 months ago

    It sounds interesting but idk what it's about and didn't understand all the words.

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