sophia asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 3 months ago

Poetry Help?

I wrote a poem for my Creative Writing class and I used the simile, "Like a deer in the headlights." My teacher said I shouldn't use that because it's too much of a cliche. Any ideas of a replacement that still conveys the shock and horror? It has to be a simile.

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  • 4 weeks ago

    Like a fawn alerted by the howl of wolves...

  • 2 months ago

    Like life at death.

  • GA41
    Lv 7
    3 months ago

    Like a speeder clocked by a radar.  Like a husband being caught with his mistress.  Like the crack of lightning on a still night.  Like an unexpected wedding proposal.  Like discovering your girlfriend is a first cousin.  Like suddenly discovering you are adopted.

  • Anonymous
    3 months ago

    LIke Herod when he found out the price of Salome's dance.

    Source(s): Not in the fridge, Salome, dear.
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  • Petter
    Lv 7
    3 months ago

    "Like Trump when realising he actually lost to Biden."

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